.Writing Task 1: The Basics
Step 1: Write a complete story with a beginning, middle, and ending.
You may only use "simple sentences" on this page.
Write at least 20 simple sentences.
There are 5 simple sentence formats: (See pages 4 & 5 in handout for examples.)
1a.S+V.
1b. S+V and V.
1c. S and S + V.
Possible Topics:
1. Ayaka have Pandorum too.(Pandorum means, everyone have Pandorum box in your mind which box surface looks like exquisite, mysterious, fascinating. The box inside hide some personality characteristic, it could be good character or bad,and have strong powerful attract you open it.) Pandorum sounds like a very interesting topic for your story!!!!
Write your story here:
1. The story's main character is Ayaka. fixed
2. She is a Japanese girl. =Needs article (a/an/the) before noun phrase. fixed
3. She lives in Hokkaido.
4. She studies Hokkaido University. -Check S+V agreement. fixed
Ø5. In her adolescence. Delete ( I will add this prepositional phrase to step 5.) -This is not a sentence. It is a prepositional phrase. (Great vocabulary!)
6. She doesn’t hasagood relationship with other people. -with whom? -Check S+V agreement. =Needs article (a/an/the) before noun phrase. fixed
7. She has a pessimistic notion. =Needs article (a/an/the) before noun phrase.fixed
8. She has melancholy.
9. She has an part-time job. =Needs article (a/an/the) before noun phrase. fixed
10. She works in the bookstore. =Needs article (a/an/the) before noun phrase.fixed
11. She works harder than other people.
12. She is interested in reading. -Excellent use of last week's gerund rule!!!!!!!! However, where's the verb?fixed
13. Her favorite book is “I have Pandorum too”.
14. The book describe the one person. 14-1. The person has melancholy.-Check S+V agreement. -There are 2 clauses in this sentence. Change it. The red group should be one sentence and the blue group should be another sentence.fixed
15. The person is a woman. =Needs article (a/an/the) before noun phrase.fixed
16. Her name is Pandorum.
17. Pandorum has a pessimistic notion. =Needs article (a/an/the) before noun phrase.fixed
18. Her characteristic is like Ayaka. 19. One of the events is in the book. -Where is the verb? This is a noun phrase (subject).fixed
20. She feels people.
20-1. People doesn’t care her. -There are 2 clauses in this sentence. Change it. The red group should be one sentence and the blue group should be another sentence.fixed
21. She feels her family.
21-1. Her family doesn’t like her. -There are 2 clauses in this sentence. Change it. The red group should be one sentence and the blue group should be another sentence.fixed
22. She feel her friend.
22-1. Her friend doesn’t like her. -There are 2 clauses in this sentence. Change it. The red group should be one sentence and the blue group should be another sentence.fixed
23. She has strong desire idea in her mind. -Check S+V agreement.fixed
24. Her brin is like a box. Her brain is like a box.fixed
25. She opened it.
26. She thinks who am I? 26-1. She thinks where am I?
26-2. She thinks how long I slept?
26-3. She thinks what I am doing?
26-4. She thinks why I am in here? - There are 6 clauses in this sentence.....Change it.fixed
27. These messages move around in her mind.- What is the verb? move-or- swirl-or- racefixed
Ø28. In one day. Delete ( I will add this prepositional phrase to step 5.) -This is not a sentence. It is a prepositional phrase.
29. She met the preacher. -What verb tense---present or past?
30. The preacher told her about God.
31. The preacher told her about Jesus.
32. She starts go to church. -This is an infinitive.fixed
Ø33. Day by Day. Delete ( I will add this prepositional phrase to step 5.) -This is not a sentence.
34. She was recovered.
35. Ayaka has a dream.
36. She likes to travel to Canada.
37. She goes to Canada.
38. She meets the guy.
39. His name is Jack.
40. Jack is from Canada. -Where is the verb?fixed
41. He lives in Vancouver. -Check the S+V agreement.fixed
42. Jack and Ayaka are studies in the same University. fixed
43. Jack is a pyschologist.
42. Ayaka and Jack fall in love.
43. Jack becomes aware of Ayaka. 43-1. Ayaka has some trouble.. -Check the S+V agreement. -Make 2 sentences for #43.fixed
44. He triesto remedy her sickness.. -Check the S+V agreement.fixed
45. He made it.
46. Ayaka is a healthy people now. -This is a noun. Please change it into an adjective.fixed
47. She succeeded. -Check spelling.fixed
48. They plan to getmaried. -"get married"fixed
49. Ayaka went to Japan to tell her parents.
50. Her parents didn't accept the marriage.-Change this verb into a NOUN.fixed
51. Ayaka goes back to Canada.. -Check the S+V agreement.fixed
52. She didn't change her idea.-Spellingfixed
53. Jack's friend is Maria.
54. Maria is a Canadian woman. -Plural or Singular?fixed
55. Maria and her all friends helped Ayaka and Jack.
56. Ayaka's mother accepts the married.. -Check the S+V agreement.fixed
57. Ayaka mother will attend the married.
58. Ayaka father will not attend the married.
59. Ayaka and Jack get a married. -The verb is "get married". We'll talk about it in class : )fixed
Ø60. The end. Delete ( I will add this noun phrase to step 5.)
Step 1: Write a complete story with a beginning, middle, and ending.
You may only use "simple sentences" on this page.
Write at least 20 simple sentences.
There are 5 simple sentence formats: (See pages 4 & 5 in handout for examples.)
1a.S+V.
1b. S+V and V.
1c. S and S + V.
2a. S+V+C. (C=prepositional phrase)
2b. S+V+C. (C=adverb)
2c. S+V+C. (C=adjective)
2d. S+V+C. (C=noun)
3. S+V+O.
4. S+V+DO+IO.
5. S+V+IO+DO.
Writing Task 1:
Possible Topics:
1. Ayaka have Pandorum too.(Pandorum means, everyone have Pandorum box in your mind which box surface looks like exquisite, mysterious, fascinating. The box inside hide some personality characteristic, it could be good character or bad,and have strong powerful attract you open it.)
Pandorum sounds like a very interesting topic for your story!!!!
Write your story here:
1. The story's main character is Ayaka. fixed
2. She is a Japanese girl. =Needs article (a/an/the) before noun phrase. fixed
3. She lives in Hokkaido.
4. She studies Hokkaido University. -Check S+V agreement. fixed
Ø5. In her adolescence. Delete ( I will add this prepositional phrase to step 5.) -This is not a sentence. It is a prepositional phrase. (Great vocabulary!)
6. She doesn’t has a good relationship with other people. -with whom? -Check S+V agreement. =Needs article (a/an/the) before noun phrase. fixed
7. She has a pessimistic notion. =Needs article (a/an/the) before noun phrase. fixed
8. She has melancholy.
9. She has an part-time job. =Needs article (a/an/the) before noun phrase. fixed
10. She works in the bookstore. =Needs article (a/an/the) before noun phrase. fixed
11. She works harder than other people.
12. She is interested in reading. -Excellent use of last week's gerund rule!!!!!!!! However, where's the verb? fixed
13. Her favorite book is “I have Pandorum too”.
14. The book describe the one person.
14-1. The person has melancholy. -Check S+V agreement. -There are 2 clauses in this sentence. Change it. The red group should be one sentence and the blue group should be another sentence. fixed
15. The person is a woman. =Needs article (a/an/the) before noun phrase. fixed
16. Her name is Pandorum.
17. Pandorum has a pessimistic notion. =Needs article (a/an/the) before noun phrase. fixed
18. Her characteristic is like Ayaka.
19. One of the events is in the book. -Where is the verb? This is a noun phrase (subject). fixed
20. She feels people.
20-1. People doesn’t care her. -There are 2 clauses in this sentence. Change it. The red group should be one sentence and the blue group should be another sentence. fixed
21. She feels her family.
21-1. Her family doesn’t like her. -There are 2 clauses in this sentence. Change it. The red group should be one sentence and the blue group should be another sentence. fixed
22. She feel her friend.
22-1. Her friend doesn’t like her. -There are 2 clauses in this sentence. Change it. The red group should be one sentence and the blue group should be another sentence. fixed
23. She has strong desire idea in her mind. -Check S+V agreement. fixed
24. Her brin is like a box. Her brain is like a box. fixed
25. She opened it.
26. She thinks who am I?
26-1. She thinks where am I?
26-2. She thinks how long I slept?
26-3. She thinks what I am doing?
26-4. She thinks why I am in here? - There are 6 clauses in this sentence.....Change it. fixed
27. These messages move around in her mind.- What is the verb? move-or- swirl-or- race fixed
Ø28. In one day. Delete ( I will add this prepositional phrase to step 5.) -This is not a sentence. It is a prepositional phrase.
29. She met the preacher. -What verb tense---present or past?
30. The preacher told her about God.
31. The preacher told her about Jesus.
32. She starts go to church. -This is an infinitive. fixed
Ø33. Day by Day. Delete ( I will add this prepositional phrase to step 5.) -This is not a sentence.
34. She was recovered.
35. Ayaka has a dream.
36. She likes to travel to Canada.
37. She goes to Canada.
38. She meets the guy.
39. His name is Jack.
40. Jack is from Canada. -Where is the verb? fixed
41. He lives in Vancouver. -Check the S+V agreement. fixed
42. Jack and Ayaka are studies in the same University. fixed
43. Jack is a pyschologist.
42. Ayaka and Jack fall in love.
43. Jack becomes aware of Ayaka.
43-1. Ayaka has some trouble.. -Check the S+V agreement. -Make 2 sentences for #43. fixed
44. He triesto remedy her sickness.. -Check the S+V agreement. fixed
45. He made it.
46. Ayaka is a healthy people now. -This is a noun. Please change it into an adjective. fixed
47. She succeeded. -Check spelling. fixed
48. They plan to get maried. -"get married" fixed
49. Ayaka went to Japan to tell her parents.
50. Her parents didn't accept the marriage.-Change this verb into a NOUN. fixed
51. Ayaka goes back to Canada.. -Check the S+V agreement. fixed
52. She didn't change her idea.-Spelling fixed
53. Jack's friend is Maria.
54. Maria is a Canadian woman. -Plural or Singular? fixed
55. Maria and her all friends helped Ayaka and Jack.
56. Ayaka's mother accepts the married.. -Check the S+V agreement. fixed
57. Ayaka mother will attend the married.
58. Ayaka father will not attend the married.
59. Ayaka and Jack get a married. -The verb is "get married". We'll talk about it in class : ) fixed
Ø60. The end. Delete ( I will add this noun phrase to step 5.)